FINAL SIN - STORY CHANGE

I presented an updated version of my story, now entitled Final Sin, to a group, and it's evident now that I need a complete reworking.

 The constructive criticism I received was that there was a lack of focus on the main character; the idea should be more concise and focus even more towards the ending. All in all, Gluttony doesn't get as much focus as he probably should. 

 Instead of trying to constantly fit a square peg in a round hole to fix my story, I'm probably going to rework my story entirely. It's not ideal, but it's probably for the best.

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