Noah Carolan NUA Animation Year 2

The first draft of my newly retitled screenplay, The Final Sin . “THE FINAL SIN” By Noah Carolan FAde In: ext. space A planet, the AntiDomain, is being bombarded by white and gold ships. Heading the pack is a large command ship of the Seven Virtues, the HEAVENSENT. HEAVENSENT (OVER TANNOY) REPENT OR DIE. REPENT OR DIE. The Heavensent repeats the phrase. EXT. BATTLEFIELD, DUSK. A battle in a destroyed city. Two groups of soldiers attack each other; white & gold drones and large mouth mutants on each side. Behind the mutants, stands a tall structure, topped with a sphere room with multiple openings; the War Room. INT. WAR ROOM, DUSK A table representing the battlefield stands in the middle of the room, with seven seats surrounding it. Five are occupied by five of the SEVEN DEADLY SINS. The five seem bored. At one of the openings, GLUTTONY looks out onto the battlefield, seemingly unimpressed. PRIDE, a small metal man, paces on top of the table, moving pie...

In this post, I'm going to talk about the two main inspirations for my new storyline. First is Psychomachia , a poem from the 5th century written by the ancient poet Prudentius. It tells of battles held between the Seven Deadly Sins and the Seven Heavenly Virtues, each 1-1 battle involving two figures that are counterparts to each other; for example, Chastity fights Lust. (A carving of Psychomachia in Catalonia, Spain) I knew with Antibody out of the picture with the new script, I needed something new to push Gluttony towards acting upon his desires. When going back into researching the concept of the Sins, I found out they have direct counterparts known as the Seven Heavenly Virtues. In Christian belief, the names and particular virtues are much more flexible and variable depending on where you look, but I stuck with the ones that fit my pre-existing Sins. And as I delved deeper, I found out about this poem (albeit a rather long poem), that chronicles how the Virtues co...

I presented an updated version of my story, now entitled Final Sin , to a group, and it's evident now that I need a complete reworking. The constructive criticism I received was that there was a lack of focus on the main character; the idea should be more concise  and focus even more towards the ending. All in all, Gluttony doesn't get as much focus as he probably should .  Instead of trying to constantly fit a square peg in a round hole to fix my story, I'm probably going to rework my story entirely. It's not ideal, but it's probably for the best.

So this is essentially the original outline for my short film screenplay task, which I've decided to entitle Final Sin . PROLOGUE 13.8 billion years ago, the celestial body of the universe came to be. And like most bodies, it needed a way to remove anything that didn’t belong, if it should ever come along. The Antibody, created from antimatter, fulfilled the universe’s need. And for billions of years, the Antibody did it’s job. Until it developed a selfish, biased taste; a taste for sentience. 6,000 years ago, as it craved more than it could attain, it created six children. Using powers of a destroyed ancient race, the children had unique abilities to assist the Antibody. Pride, Greed, Wrath, Lust, Sloth and Envy grew up to be feared across the universe, spreading their armies from planet to planet to feed their father. They were known as The Sins. Then the seventh Sin came to be. 2,000 years ago, Gluttony was born. He was dejected by all his siblings… but not his father...